I can't decide whether you're paranoid or conceited, Nigel.
Anyway, I agree with ES's comments; you need an attention-grabbing headline and first paragraph, otherwise "click", they're gone. I await Moth's re-draft with eagerness.
BTW, who's actually going to put the site together? Are there any volunteers? I'll do it if pressed, but I've got such a lot on at the moment that I'd be struggling, so I'll be glad if someone else steps forward.